Doh Minion's third entry: haypi prologue

Eight they were, King Pirates great
Who roamed the ocean blue
They sought to seize and conquer Fate
And Time's plans to undo
They sieved the sands from Sea to Sea
And treasures found were vast
But none was greater than the Key
That could bid time avast
The key was found and used but lo!
It turned against their will
To stone the eight were turned and lost
And time itself stood still!
So now one must set forth once more
And gather all the Eight
To seek the Key they used before
And liberate our fate!

That is pretty good imma try and make my own now

bump!

This is my first attempt in verse. I'm using Coleridge's "Tale of the Ancient Mariner" for the metre and style. Let me know what you think.

This is great! I love it.

The line "So now one must set forth once more" seemed a little awkward to me. I think it was using "one" and "once" so close together.

This is the smarmiest entry of all! Why did it not take first place?

This is great! I love it.

The line "So now one must set forth once more" seemed a little awkward to me. I think it was using "one" and "once" so close together.

It was actually intentional, I was looking for a little alliteration. (there. I just did it again. Lol.).
Alliterative verse has that awkward and more "ancient" sound to it.

Ahh, I see. Anyway excellent job and congrats

And lol @ rollocks "smarmiest." I'm adding that one into my daily vocabulary